T1 Writing


We are learning to...
  •  write a personal recount about something we have done or experienced
Criteria:
  • have an opening statement that tells who what and when
  • write the events in the order they happened
  • have a conclusion or personal response

Rugby

In the weekend I watched the rugby. It was an exciting match to me when we got to 7 - 5 but the Cheetahs got 2 tries which made the score 14-7. The Crusaders were losing but it wasn't the end of the match. In the second half of the match we scored 8 tries. At the end of the match the score was 57-14. The Crusaders won. I felt happy because I like it when the Crusaders win.

Teacher comment:
You have written a good recount with a beginning, middle and end.
Perhaps you may have written some more details about the match like who scored the tries and did all of the goals go over?

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